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Book Review of S.E. Lund’s Dominion series #1-3

I grabbed the Dominion series, by S. E. Lund, from the Amazon free list.

Dominion
Ascension
Retribution

DominionDescription from Goodreads:
When pre-med student Eve Hayden searches for a translator for an ancient French illuminated manuscript she found in her dead mother’s research files, she gets more than she bargained for: Michel de Cernay, a former priest and eight hundred year old vampire and his identical twin brother Julien, a former knight. The manuscript details their death and rebirth as vampires in 1224 during the Cathar Crusade at the hands of an ancient vampire.

Michel wants to prevent Eve from reading the manuscript or becoming a vampire hunter like her dead mother before her. He hopes Eve will instead pursue her studies in music. Unable to compel her to forget him and all about vampires, Michel asks Eve to become his Adept, working cases with him protecting the Treaty of Clairveaux that keeps vampires in the closet and peace between the two species. He also wants her to become his sexual submissive and despite her initial reluctance, Eve is drawn to the idea of submitting to this beautiful vampire.

She also meets his brother Julien, a brash and mercurial opposite to Michel’s calm determination. The temperamental opposite of Michel, Julien tries to complicate the budding romance between Eve and Michel in the hopes of winning Eve for himself. The brothers play a dangerous game of power with an ancient enemy in an effort to prevent Dominion — when vampires rule over humans.

Gifted with paranormal skills, planning to follow in her mother’s footsteps as a vampire hunter, Eve is torn between loyalty to her mother’s cause and her desire for these twins.

Review:
I’m not really getting the impassioned ravings for book. I didn’t hate it, but I didn’t love it either. I finished it with a bit of a ‘meh’ feeling, mostly because everything (characters, history, world, etc) felt sketched out instead of solidly established. Even the sex was little more than being told how amazing the feelings were and then “he shoved it in.” Really? That’s all?

Eve was whiny and weak-willed. Her internal monologue was repetitive and generally consisted of ‘I want to submit, but I’m a modern woman and therefore shouldn’t desire to submit, but I do.’ Around and round she went. She had no backbone. Not because she wanted to submit to Michel, that’s a valid life choice. But because she didn’t even have the strength-of-will to make a decision. And since she couldn’t remember what made her that way, it all felt hollow. How can the reader know Eve if Eve didn’t know herself?

Michel was actually kind of cute in a damaged sort of way, but the whole Dominant/Submissive thing felt really, really forced. It didn’t fit his personality. I understood what Lund was trying to set up, with his history and all, but the switch between normal, clingy, insecure Michel and dominant, demanding, master Michel was jarring and inconsistent. Plus, the whole insistence that Eve submit completely, in all things, made very little sense to me (and that’s before I even get into the fact that they’d known each other for about a day when he started trying to demand this). As if there can’t be a hierarchy of command between two people without one bending COMPLETELY to the will of the other. Hmm, makes me wonder about every soldier to ever obey his/her commanding officer. There could be an interesting M/M story in there somewhere.

About the only character I got a firm grasp of by the end of the book was Julien (because of his manuscript) and he’s not even one of the main characters, at least not in this book. There does seem to be an interesting battle of Biblical forces building. Perhaps it will come to fruition in the next book. It sure didn’t in this one, since the book ended on a very abrupt cliffhanger. It was so sudden, actually, that I’d assert this isn’t a whole story. It’s half, maybe a third of one (if the next ends the same way.) Why do modern authors do this? It drives me completely bat-shit crazy.

The writing was pretty good though. I did notice a few grammar/editorial foul-ups and the e-formatting was painful (no paragraph indicators, broken sentences, random spacings, once I even found the first half of a sentence relocated to the end of the chapter). But I will be reading the next in the series, Ascension.

Ascension Description:

Book 2 of the Dominion Series, Ascension, follows Eve as her world is turned upside down when events separate Eve from Michel and she must remain in the care of Julien. As she is drawn more deeply into Julien’s life, she develops an attachment to him that she cannot deny. 

Review:
Ok, I have a problem. I want to write a review of this book, but if I’m honest and mention all the points I feel worth bringing up I’ll just sound like I’m ranting and spewing hate. So, what to leave out? It’s gonna be a long and unpleasant one. I apologise up front.

Suffice it to say I didn’t like Ascension. I thought Dominion was OK, but this book was horrible. It wasn’t that the writing was bad, but that I HATED the characters, ALL OF THEM. I found Eve to be the most pitiful and disgusting female lead I’ve ever encountered. She might as well have had Victim, Victim, Victim stamped on her forehead. Julian was just an ass and Michel turned out to be so selfish it was hard to face. Seriously, I wanted to shoot them all…except Vasily. Vasily was all right. He was about the only one I could tolerate.

My first issue was that this book seemed to have one theme that was repeated over and over and over and OVER again—’You must submit and obey, Eve.’ My god, I got tired of reading that, especially in the first half. The thing is, while I understand the fantasy appeal of reading about submitting sexually to a strong man (it’s why I picked this series up), watching first Michel and then Julien try to force…no, not force…talk Eve into submission by repeating ‘you must,’ ‘you have to,’ you’ve got no choice but to,’ etc got damn tiring. Plus, they didn’t want just sexual subordination, but complete submission in all things. I know it’s a personal opinion, but I found it all so far from sexy I almost couldn’t take it, for two reasons.

First, part of what I think makes the submission fantasy erotic is the fact that the woman is indulging herself in something she wants. However, Michel and Julien’s continued nagging for submission suggests that she didn’t in fact want to. The author threw the occasional “she found it secretly appealing” in there and I did understand that the men were supposed to be reading her real internal wishes, but Eve’s conscious mind rebelled at the idea of being a slave, especially a mindless blood slave. So if it wasn’t something Eve wanted, but something the men were trying to impose (which it very much felt like), it’s lost the very element that made it appealing to me in the first place. And despite their constant demands of obedience, they never allowed her time to learn to trust them or showed any inclination to take her needs into consideration, thereby proving themselves trustworthy. Jackasses, the both of them.

Secondly, the D/s fantasy kind of requires a man to have a forceful enough personality that Eve would want to submit to him. It’s a falsehood, of course, but part of the whole erotic fantasy, not reality. However, Michel and Julien came across as wheedling. They may as well have been begging. “Please submit to me.” Please do what I say.” Please give me all the power.” The fantasy doesn’t work both ways.

I think what Lund was probably trying to create is the impression that the men had such powerful personalities that they could force Eve’s to want to submit, but because they cared for her were willing to indulge her fruitless attempts to resist. But it didn’t work. It can’t. Either they are strong, dominant men that the woman chooses to submit to or they are the softer sort who try to cajole her into subordination—one or the other. Well, I suppose this could become a true bondage and rape themed book and they really could force her, but that option wouldn’t accomplish the book’s goals either.

There also seemed to be some disconnect about the whole dominance thing to start with. Book one suggested that this was a quirk Michel had developed after his time with Marguerite, a form of self-protection or something. But here Julien acted the same, as did Luke. He even referred to it as “the old ways.” If this was a vampire-thing, as opposed to a Michel-thing it’s a very different story and it feels like evidence of plot drift on the author’s part. I can’t know this for sure, obviously, but it felt like she started writing it one way, then ended up with something different and never went back to match the two up.

Then, when the history of rape was brought in I almost just dropped the series. Is there no other way available to authors to show a woman’s vulnerabilities? Seriously, it was predictable, unoriginal and just plain tawdry. It crept up to ruin almost any pleasant moment Eve, and therefore I, had in the book.

I get that Eve had had a tragic past and, therefor, deserves a little slack. I really do. But I have never had so little respect for a female character. I can tell you exactly when I lost my last dregs of respect too. I made a Kindle note at 54% saying, “If she gives in to him, I’ll lose what little respect I have left for her.” Then a paragraph later posted a second note saying, “There you go. I no longer respect this woman at all. Pathetic.” That’s how I feel about Eve. She’s pathetic, spine-less, gullible, and apparently has no respect for her own self-worth. So why should I? The things she accepted, the way she let Julien repeatedly devalue her and then crawled to him sickened me. And this was not within the confines of a structured D/s relationship. It’s just the way he treated her.

Plus, she’s just about too stupid to live. Example: a co-worker risked his life to bring her some research related to a clue she knew to be important. She then refused to read it because she didn’t believe the mythology it referred to. Listen bitch, if a person thinks it’s important enough to risk his life to bring it to you, you read it. If not out of self-preservation, then at least out of basic courtesy. Besides, she’d accepted vampires, telepathy, miraculous healings, etc already. So why be so ridiculously obstinate about other supernatural occurrences? I don’t think I’ve ever liked a character less and I know I’ve never had less respect for one.

Julien was only slightly better. Of the three main characters, him, Eve and Michel I liked him most. But that’s still not much. He was a complete jerk to Eve, constantly making unreasonable demands and treating her like dirt. And he was always pushing drugs, booze and blood on her as a way to steal her control and force her to release her inhibitions. However, there were hints that, had the two of them had a little longer, he might have improved. Problem is that about 20% from the end Michel returned and Julien was essentially dropped from the plot completely. I have no idea where he went. I mean the warehouse was HIS home, but he up and vanished. It was as if he and Michel couldn’t occupy the plot at the same time.

Probably worst of all, though, is that apparently a war was going on, but it’s all behind the scenes. The men…you know those all important men who can go out and effect the world, unlike us little women, were constantly disappearing to do who knows what. But all the reader got was Eve’s drivel and internal confusion about her hope that someone would come home and fuck her that night. I get that this is erotica, but if the plot is based on a Biblical war, then the reader needs to see at least a little of it.

Again, the writing here was fine—pretty much not worth discussing, good or bad. I’m not trying to impart anything about the author’s actual skill. But, I hated this book with a level of vitriolic passion that surprises even me. But I have book three on my Kindle and I have this horrible morbid desire to read it and see if the series manages to redeem itself or can somehow manage to get worse. I’ve checked out other reviews and I can see I’m in the minority here. People like the book. I don’t see the appeal. In fact, even though I usually enjoy a little foray into fantasy domination, much of what was written here repulsed me.  But I respect ‘to each their own.’ I’d give this a one star if I could. But I generally hold that a complete, properly structured book deserves at least two stars. So, that’s what I’ll give it.

RetributionDescription:
Eve trains as a Blood Witness and Vampire Hunter for the Council of Clairveaux’s Special Cases Unit. As she prepares to protect humanity from Dominion, she’s torn between the beautiful de Cernay brothers, Michel and Julien.

 Review:
I didn’t hate it! I know, normally that wouldn’t be a recommendation for a book But considering how I felt at the end of book two, a basic, ‘I didn’t hate it’ is high praise indeed.

Michel never managed to endear himself to me and for much of this book I wished he would disappear again. But at the VERY end, he showed a side I could maybe like. Eve was still pitiful. She just showed no real volition. She basically went with any man who came for her. Yea, she complained about it, but when Michel came for her she went with him, then when Julien showed up she scarpered with him, then Michel took her again, and then Dylan snatched her up and she just floated along with him too. She went along with Soran’s plans and basically allowed herself to be used by everyone. She was a seriously, wimpy woman who I didn’t enjoy at all. BUT, I didn’t want to slowly scrape the skin from her scalp as I did throughout Ascension. That’s an improvement right? Julien however, Julien I fell a little in love with. I think it was the first time in the whole series I actual connected with a character. Too bad he was so easily controlled.

I’m still lost about Michel’s insistence on total submission from Eve. It just made no sense. Every-time Eve asked why he wanted it, he responded with some variation of, “I don’t want it, you do” (which already annoys me because it inferred she was too stupid to even know her own feelings, but he of course could) or “we have to do it to fool Soran.” Both answers bother me.

The first because it’s an occluded fallacy. It ignores the fact that he wanted it very much and not just for her benefit. It’s what he liked in general. This was made apparent on numerous occupations, though he seemed to continue to deny it. Plus, if it really were just for her, all that would be needed would be sexual domination, which she was willing to give him. It was blind control of the rest of her life she chafed about and that non-sexual domination (what she wore or ate, whether she was or wasn’t on birth control, where she lived, when she was allowed to speak, etc) in no way addressed her personal issues that submission was claimed to free her from.

Second, how exactly was her act of submission supposed to fool the super-evil, TELEPATHIC bad-guy? It just wouldn’t. So why bother with the act? It all felt like Michel’s lie to get control of her, which made me hate him and lose respect for her for allowing it.

Though most of the writing was fine, the whole ‘for’ thing became like nails on a chalkboard to me. Here is an example sentence, “He pulls me into his arms and I let him, not fighting his touch for I need it now.” Multiply that by about 400. The patter started to grate.

The book did drag a bit in the middle, but Eve was finally allowed to leave the bedroom long enough to participate in at least some of the action—even if it was blindly, without being told the details (little more than an animate tool). I swear there wasn’t a single man in the book(s) who thought she deserved to know anything, let alone be party to a decision and she let this pattern ride. I still think the vampire/angel Biblical battle plot is an interesting one. Too bad it’s being drug over so many books. Though this book does actually have a conclusion of sorts, a new arc was established at the tale end. So, there must be more books to come.

 

Book Review of Finding Meara, by Lara Schiffbauer

Finding MearaI received Lara Schiffbauer‘s Finding Meara from the Story Cartel. I’ve also seen it on the KDP free list.

Description from Goodreads:

To keep her safe, Hazel Michelli’s parents never told her she was adopted, or that her birthplace was in an alternative land where magic and monsters exist. She found out the truth the day a ferocious winged creature stole her from her Denver apartment and delivered her to Lucian, the sadistic Lifeforce magician who happens to be Hazel’s biological father.

“Dysfunctional family” takes on new meaning when she learns Lucian must sacrifice a daughter to maintain immortality and take over the Realm. When Hazel’s younger half-sister disappears just days before the Rite, Lucian moves Hazel to the top of the sacrificial short list.

Afraid, yet compelled to protect her four-year-old half-sister, Hazel races between both worlds, searching for Meara while being hunted by Lucian. Their lives, and the future of the Realm, leave her no room for failure.

Review:

✯✯✯ Spoiler Alert ✯✯✯

I wish to discuss aspects of this book that I liked and/or disliked. It would be far more difficult and less informative to not use examples to do this. Thus, this review has quite a few spoilers. If you’d like to avoid these, you might want to skip to the last paragraph. You’ve been warned.

I really wish that there had been something in the description to clue me in to the fact that this is a YA novel. I’m afraid I was taken by surprise with that. I mean, the main character, Hazel, is 26, after all!

Ok, maybe it’s not really YA fiction, but I think it really wanted to be. It reads like it does. So, the odd adult moments, like Tessra’s come-ons, seemed horrendously out of place. While Hazel’s hesitation about admitting to her parents that she’s had sex clashed harshly with her age and lifestyle. Again, she’s 26, has lived on her own since graduating high school, and had at least one steady boyfriend. I think her parents probably knew she was sexually active. So, as a character, she really needed to be more confident in her sexuality or 16. The latter would have made sense with the rest of the book as well as Hazel’s basic personality.

I suppose what I’m getting at isn’t really about Hazel at all. Rather it’s a matter of the book needing to choose a genre and fit it. I have no problem with genre-crossing in terms of Sci-fi/Fantasy or Action Adventure/Mystery, but Adult/Young Adult really is an either/or scenario. I don’t think Finding Meara knows where it wants to fall and it shows.

The whole thing also moves at a breakneck pace, and though that’s sometimes fun, here it just left me feeling like I was being dragged behind a speeding train…Oh, we find out Hazel is a compulsive gambler with uncannily good luck. Oh, she’s attacked and kidnapped. Oh, she’s transported to a foreign realm. Oh, she discovers talking and other manner of magical creatures. Oh, she escapes. Oh, she possibly falls in love. Oh, she’s attacked again but escapes. Oh, she finds out she’s pregnant. (WTF? Where did that come from?) Oh, she’s attacked again. Oh, she finds out she’s adopted. Oh, she finds out she has a stepsister. Oh, she finds out she has to return to the mystery realm, and apparently only she can do it—not sure why only her, though. Oh, that’s only the first 1/4 of the book, roughly 65 pages! It’s too much, too quickly. I couldn’t breathe, keep up, or enjoy it. I was never given a moment to get to know Hazel, anyone else, or the world(s) the book is set in.

In fact, beyond being told that the land has been parcelled off and the number of immortals and Daragwards limited to one per area, there is almost no world-building at all! I have no idea why Lucian is allowed to sacrifice his female offspring. I don’t know how it works and if a woman could sacrifice her sons and become immortal, or if this is one more example, so common in fiction, of the disposability of females—where a 12-year-old boy is given more social worth than a full-grown woman. I don’t know if there is a government or any religion. I don’t even know if the Adven Realm is a city, country, continent, or something else.

Then there were the romances, which again I was caught off guard by. There was nothing about romance in the description. But, more importantly, neither of them made much sense. One was a…well not insta-love, but insta-relationship. You know, the sort where two people meet, are attracted, and instantly have something real and meaningful? No kiss is just a kiss. It’s a kiss full of hope and promise. Drives me nuts. The other was all about denial, but why? The position of Daragward is apparently a hereditary title passed from father to son. So there is nothing to suggest that a Daragward can’t have a mate. In fact, it kind of requires it. Why all the angst, then?

The plain fact of the matter is that I dimly didn’t like the book. The writing was fine. The editing was fine—I only noticed one or two major mishaps. The idea behind the story is an interesting one. It has an eye-catching cover. I even liked some of the characters. But there was just so much else that I didn’t like. It all might be personal dislike kind of stuff, but there is all the same. 

Book Review of the Niki Slobodian series #1-4, by J.L. Murray

I grabbed all of J.L. Murray‘s Niki Slobodian series off of the Amazon free list over the last year or so.

Between the Devil and the Deep Blue Sea
The Devil is a Gentleman
Before the Devil Knows You’re Dead
The Devil Was an Angel

Between the Devil and the Deep Blue SeaDescription from Goodreads:
Niki Slobodian sees things – things that aren’t supposed to be there. Labeled an Abnormal by New Government, her name is tacked onto the Registry, which seems to be getting longer these days. Now she can’t work or she’ll end up the same place as her father: in prison. But with no money coming in, Niki’s getting desperate. 

So when a mysterious client offers to get her off the Registry in exchange for taking his case, Niki jumps at the chance. All she has to do is round up a homicidal Dark that’s escaped from Hell and is cruising around the city in borrowed bodies. The murders are piling up, with Niki’s notorious father somehow involved, and Niki’s running out of time. And it seems the Dark isn’t the only thing that escaped…

Review: 
I really quite enjoyed this book. I found Niki to be a strong, quick-witted heroine. Her sidekicks were useful and there was a surprising amount of humour. It all came together in an interesting paranormal action/adventure mystery with excellent writing and flawless editing. There did seem to be a lot of history between some of the characters that made me wonder if I was really reading the first book, but I caught up soon enough.

My only real complaint, two-fold as it is, was that the book felt very short. Amazon lists it at 160 pages, but I started it after dinner and was in bed before 11. In that time, I also bathed the kiddies and sent them off to dreamland. So even if it there is an physical page count of 160 somewhere, I bet it’s double spaced.

Also contributing to this perception of brevity was the way challenges were overcome very, very easily. If seemed like Niki and her crew waltzed in, said “be gone” and vanquished the big-bads effortlessly. Of course, it wasn’t that simple, but it felt like it was. She managed to solve two mysteries and save the day twice in the 160 pages available. That didn’t leave a lot for buildup, tension, or elaborate planning.

Yes, it all felt too easy but that really was made up for by the humour and engaging characters. I can’t wait to read The Devil is a Gentleman.

The Devil was a Gentleman Description from Goodreads: 
Where Niki goes, death is never far behind. 

Everyone Niki knows hates Congressman Frank Bradley. He is the father of New Government, after all. He started the Registry, and the world adopted it. Bradley is the man who separated Abnormals and Normals, and made it a crime for Abbies to exist.

So when Bradley shows up at Niki’s door bearing a terrible secret, then promptly disappears, she feels compelled to dig deeper. But the more Niki uncovers, the more danger she is in. A mysterious organization is out for her blood – literally – and her father’s criminal past may not be as self-serving as she thought. There is also the matter of Niki’s inscrutable employer Sam and the secret of his identity. With help from her partner Bobby Gage, Niki finds out just how little she knew about her family, and the truth of who she really is.

Review:
I’d call this another hit. I continue to enjoy Niki and Bobby’s wit and the mysteries Murray sets up for us. I also really started to feel the influence of, or similarities to Kim Harrison‘s The Hollows series or Laurell K. Hamilton‘s Anita Blake Vampire Hunter (before the plots devolved into cheap erotica). It has a similar gun toting, strong heroine with a tendency to gather followers, fans and abilities as the series progress.

Like the first, this book also felt short. It also introduced some interesting side characters, that seemed to have just been dropped unceremoniously and it ended on a doozy of a cliffhanger, which I hate, but the writing was just as crisp and well edited as in the first. I’m looking forward to book 3, Before the Devil Knows You’re Dead.

Before the Devil Knows You're DeadDescription from Goodreads:
The worlds are out of balance. The Creator is missing. And the war between Heaven and Hell has begun.

Niki Slobodian came back, but there were side effect. She is filled with a strange power no one seems to be able to explain. Not even Sam. She is also plagued with strange visions whenever she touches anyone. This does nothing but complicate the fact that she may be the reason for the war raging in the streets of her own city. A war that could mean the end of humanity. 

Niki has always done whatever she had to for the people she loves, but this time is different. With carnage escalating and the people she cares for in danger, Niki and Sam must work together to save what is left of humanity. And with a psychotic archangel trying to assume to post of the Creator, and one slim chance to right the balance, the odds are against them.

Nothing is ever easy for a Slobodian. Not even stopping a war that could unmake the world.

Review:
I’m still enjoying this series, but it’s also faltering in much the same way as many other such series. There seems to come a time when the main character reaches a point where she goes from being an exceptionally powerful or talented whatever, to becoming the most powerful. It becomes unbelievable after a while and I think Niki reached that point in this book. Perhaps it will be pulled back a bit in the next one. I hope so. Because if she remains so all-powerful, what challenge can there really be? I’m holding off on my judgment on this until I finish the next book.

Some major Biblical characters are offed in this book. I had a hard time wrapping my mind around that one…and I’m not even religious. But it’s difficult to fathom using preexisting myths and then ignoring or changing large parts of them in order to fit the plot. It’s jarring. Be that as it may, Niki again proved herself to be a resilient woman of stellar moral fibre and imperturbable determination.

The Devil was an AngelDescription from Goodreads:
Niki Slobodian knows loss. She knows tragedy. But she has never known this kind of pain. After the war the Archangel Michael waged on her city, Niki is dealing with the loss of her loved ones. And the haunting suspicion that everything was her fault. As well as her new duty to help all the lost souls cross over.

But when Niki’s only living friend, Bobby Gage, comes up missing, she has to take action. She enlists the help of Lucifer and together they learn that Bobby has been tracking Kane, the man who murdered his family, and is now killing again, leaving a trail of mutilated corpses all across the globe. And with the power to disappear unnoticed, it seems an impossible feat to find him and stop him.

But Niki is familiar with the impossible. And she would do anything to help her only living friend. Anything.

Review:
I’d say this was a great end to the series, but I get the distinct impression that it isn’t actually the end. Rather, The Devil was an Angel is simply the most recent book published in the series. I’d certainly be interested in reading more if Ms. Murray decides to write them, but I’d be disappointed if it turned into one of those series that never actually concludes. I find that so unsatisfying.

I was plenty satisfied with this book, however. Niki continued learning about herself and her abilities. She grew a lot as a character, especially around the matter of acceptance. Lucifer was an interesting incarnation of himself. I really felt bad for poor Sam though, despite all his misdeeds and the first half of the book is almost devastatingly sad.

There is quite a bit more gore in this book than the previous ones. I’m not particularly bothered by this, but some might be. But Ms. Murray’s writing remained exceptional ’till the end. Thumbs up.